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As mental health providers, social workers are uniquely interested in integrating social justice efforts into practice, both in the types of treatments provided as well as the populations served. Thus, social workers typically provide services to culturally and socioeconomically diverse populations. Despite the growth in the social work and outpatient mental health professions, there is empirical evidence that most clients in the United States who receive psychotherapy are not being treated with evidence-based practices (Shafran, et al, 2009). Quality of care is particularly low in community mental health settings, which are often staffed by untrained and poorly supervised providers, and feature significant staff attrition. Given the prevalence of social workers in mental health practice and the state of available care, training social workers in the provision of quality mental health care would be good for overall public health. Further, in light of social workers’ tendency toward working with underserved populations, training social workers in evidence-based practices is a social justice issue. Without such training, high quality care becomes something that can only be accessed by those who are well-resourced.  

Social Workers tend to provide services to culturally and socioeconomically diverse populations. We are uniquely interested in integrating social justice efforts into our practice both in the types of treatment we provide, and the populations we serve. Despite the growth in the social work and outpatient mental health professions, there is empirical evidence that most clients, in the United States, who receive psychotherapy, are not being treated with evidence-based practices (Shafran, et al, 2009). Quality of care is particularly low in community mental health settings, which are often staffed by untrained and poorly supervised providers, and feature significant staff attrition. Given the prevalence of social workers in mental health practice, and the state of available care, training for social workers providing mental health care is a public health good. Further, in light of social workers’ tendency toward working with underserved populations, training social workers in evidence-based practices is a social justice issue. Without such training, high quality care becomes something that can only be accessed by those who are well-resourced.  

aren't there WAY Too many commas here?  I'm editing something and this person, I think, adds too many, commas, I'm wondering, do you agree?

Social Workers tend to provide services to culturally and socioeconomically diverse populations. We are uniquely interested in integrating social justice efforts into our practice, both in the types of treatment we provide, and the populations we serve. Despite the growth in the social work and outpatient mental health professions, there is empirical evidence that most clients, in the United States,  who receive psychotherapy, are not being treated with evidence based practices (Shafran, et al, 2009). Quality of care is particularly low in community mental health settings, which are often staffed by untrained and poorly supervised providers, and feature significant staff attrition. Given the prevalence of social workers in mental health practice, and the state of available care, training for social workers providing mental health care is a public health good. Further, in light of social workers’ tendency toward working with underserved populations, training social workers in evidence-based practices is a social justice issue. Without such training, high quality care becomes something that can only be accessed by those who are well-resourced.  

aren't there WAY Too many commas here?  I'm editing something and this person, I think, adds too many, commas, I'm wondering, do you agree?